i disagree with this opinion. If i watching tv i can't talk to family. when eating dinner my family want to talk. tv is made family sad. so please don't watch tv in dinner.
Recently we have heard news about impoverished foods security such as selling the frozen foods, in which were made China, with a toxic substance which has a possibility of killing human and doing the foods which were no longer eaten on account of its poor quality. In face of those situation such as represented above, first I would like to think about its cause or root in terms of the world-wide influential ‘Capitalism’ and later, I should also like to argue the obligation or responsibility of today’s foods industry. # # # Frankly speaking, when I look into those problems of foods security, I can’t help saying that they have root in the system of the ‘Intense Capitalism’ in which has been prevailing entire world, even China or Cuba that had once sided with communist system, since the end of Cold war. Here what I want to say is that; the intense capitalism has been spurring the intense competition between many countries, many multinational firms and that it( the intense competition) has also been breeding the system in our world that ‘money’ is uttermost. Additionally, I must say that the US and its subject countries have contributed to the pervasion of the intense competition; of cause they have intended to do so. I can also state that the US-we can thought to be a notable contributor- was the most vicious actor in the world;
Recently we have heard news about the impoverished foods security; selling the frozen foods, that were made in China, with a toxic substance which has a possibility of killing human and doing the foods which can no longer eaten on account of its poor quality. In face of those situation such as one represented above, first I would like to think about its cause or root in terms of the world-wide influential ‘Capitalism’ and later, I should also like to argue the obligation or responsibility of today’s foods industry.
This is a very sensitive and difficult problem, but I do not approve of this statement. You can easily imagine what would happen to our society if it were to be abolished. Without capital punishment our criminal rates would be getting higher and higher,and ,our street would no longer be a safer place. Besides,I storongly believe that it is only right that people should be punished for their crimes and anyone who is brutal enough to mudder someone else deserves to be sentenced to death. Our society is always governed and ruled under the law,which serves us to keep our society in peace. Without death penalty I am afraid that the law will lose its dominant power and influence on the nation.
問 インターネットが与える子供達への影響について 10語程度で5文以上 I think that it is good for children to use inter-net. For example,they can know something to the world by using it. Of course,That help them to understand many international problems. The best way to diminish trashes is to know well about the problem. I think that children should use inter-net more and more.
Recently we have heard news about the impoverished food security--selling the frozen foods, in which were made China, with a toxic substance which has a possibility of killing human and selling the food which can no longer be eaten on account of its poor quality-- In face of those situation such as those represented above, first I would like to think about its cause or root in terms of the world-wide influential ‘Capitalism’ and later, I should also like to argue the obligation or responsibility of today’s foods industry.
Recently we have heard news about (本題に入るまでが長い) the impoverished food security (→the safety of foodsぐらい) --selling the frozen foods, (食品の安全性全般かと思ったら中国の冷凍食品に限定?) (frozen foodsは凍った食べ物、冷凍食品ならchilled meals) in which were made China, (which were made in chinaか、もっと単純にmade in chinaでよろし) (polluted/contaminated) with a toxic substance (一般には単数とは限らない →toxic substances/materials) which has a possibility of killing human (→can potensially kill people who eat them 原文の主語述語の単複は呼応せず) and selling the food which can no longer be eaten on account of its poor quality-- (農薬餃子か、賞味期限切れの別の問題か?読者はわからないのでイライラ) (---はなるべく使わない) In face of those situation such as those represented above, (上記程度の文には長すぎる For those situationsぐらい) first I would like to think about (とにかく前置きが長くてくどい) its cause or root in terms of the world-wide influential‘Capitalism’ (そんな大上段構えて大丈夫か!?) and later, I should also like to argue the obligation or responsibility of today’s foods industry. (大学入試じゃないよね?卒論ぐらい?)
Many bad news about the safety of our foods have been reported recently; (chilled) meals contaminated with toxic materials (which may kill those who eat them), expired foods, and reproduction of new foods from expired products. (生々しい具体例をもっと挙げる) To understand the situation, the presence of 'Capitalism' among the world-wide influential companies is pointed out here. Later, obligation and responsibility of today's foods industry are discussed.
>>906 I think that it is good for children to use inter-net. (I thinkを冒頭に置くとちょい間抜け) For example,they can know something to the world by using it. Of course,That help them to understand many international problems. (For exampleとかOf courseは不要。字数稼ぎミエミエで印象悪い) (that以下は何いってんのかわかんない) The best way to diminish trashes is to know well about the problem. (to diminish trashesが何だかわからない。英語版でtrashは「ゴミ箱」のこと) I think that children should use inter-net more and more. (ってか、全然考えてないだろおまいw)
The internet can be very useful not only to adults but also to children. Children can know something of the world precisely and instantaneously through it. There are, however, many problems about it, in particular as to children's use. To understand the problem, it is necessary to specify the problem.(何いってんの!?) I think that children should use the internet more and more.
I am against the Death penalty. Everyone has the right of life. However,the Death penalty deprives criminals of this right. How could we justify the deprivation of the right of life? It is impossible. Some people who are for the Death penalty say that this system prevents a heinous crime such as murder.
However,it is doubtful that the Death penalty is effective in detering people from committing a heinous crime. For some criminals don't fear being executed. So I think we should abolish this system.
I am against the Death penalty. (主張が明確OK) Everyone has the right of life. (→the right to liveが語呂的に宜し) However,the Death penalty deprives criminals of this right. (howeverはここぞ!というところにしか使わぬこと。ここは省く) How could we justify the deprivation of the right of life? It is impossible. (派生語を含めて同じ言葉の重複使用はなるべく避ける。) Some people who are for the Death penalty say that this system prevents a heinous crime such as murder. (some people sayの表現は軽い) (Death penalty is partly based on an expectation that it might prevent〜など) However,it is doubtful that the Death penalty is effective in detering people from committing a heinous crime. (英辞郎で「抑止力」を検索すると次の例文が出てくる) ("Capital punishment cannot be a deterrent to serious crimes.") (これを借りると次の一文を含めて It cannot be a deterrent to serious crimes, for some criminals don't fear of it.など。forは「理由」。でもother criminalsは? とツッコミが入りそう) For some criminals don't fear being executed. So I think we should abolish this system. (主張が明確OKだが、くどい。字数を内容の充実に使うべき)
I think we can't deal with the flood of information. However, there are other things we can do. One of them is to tell children "there are a lot of untrue information, so you have to see information as much as you can, and get true information."
I think we can't deal with the flood of information. (Why? You must face with it!) (上の文を言うならdeal(単に「扱う」)よりもcope(「何とかする」)のほうがよい) (「扱う」ことができないのなら以下に言う「できるだけたくさんの情報を見て 正しい情報を得る」こともできないわけで、論旨が破綻している) However, there are other things we can do. (この文不要) One of them is to tell children "there are a lot of untrue information, (untrueは素直に"false"と) so you have to see information as much as you can, and get true information." ("get information"のgetの重複を避けたのだろうがseeはreceiveのほうがよい) (you must receive information as much as you can, and get the true one) (わざわざ間接話法にすることもない)
There is a dizzying deal of information that we even couldn't manage. I recommend that we (should) learn "media literacy", in which we can deal with ample information. The media literacy is the ability to find out the necessary one from a vast pool of information.